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Chapter One
It was cold and dark in the luggage compartment of that boeing 747. He didn’t know that yet. He was still bundled up in the foetal position safe and warm inside the custom made duffel bag. This duffel bag had some very special “features”. Not only was it completely water proof and air-tight, it was impervious to x-ray and ultra-sound scans. Actually, if the bag ever was scanned the sensors built into the lining would detect what sort of scan it was and then project a false image back to the scanner. This bag was a smuggler’s dream come true.
He twisted his left wrist slightly towards his face so he could see his watch. 6 minutes of air left. It was time to get started. He closed his eyes and tilted his head slightly, trying to listen for signs of any life. The only thing that he could hear was the drone of the plane’s engines. Good, that means that everything is going to plan. He freed himself from the bag, thinking again how stupid it was that the people who had made him the bag had neglected to include a way for it to be opened from the inside. Obviously he had sent that one back and demanded a replacement. It had arrived just in time, and it was out of this bag that he now emerged.
Three hours spent curled up in a bag designed to carry not much more than a few days worth of underwear and clothes tends to make a person a little in need of a damn good stretch. So that’s what he did… slowly he stood up, straightened his body to its full height, then arched his back and extended his arms. legs. fingers, even his toes. There were several loud cracks as his joints found the freedom of unrestricted movement once more.
Ahhhhhhh! That’s better.
No time to relax, he thought. Time to find his tools and supplies. He set to work at finding the other bag. The bag that had everything he needed to carry out his mission. A mission that he had put so many years into planning and preparing for. He had already tried and failed at least a thousand times before, but this time… This time would be different. He had taken into account every conceivable variable. He had thought of everything. He couldn’t fail. He had to succeed.
He found his bag of tools and supplies a couple feet away from where he’d been laying and headed for the maintenance hatch above the main undercarriage assembly. Once there, the first thing he had to do was to fool the aircraft’s computer systems into thinking that nothing was going on. The last thing he needed was for some over-observant airline pilot to investigate a blinking red light. He popped the cover off of an access panel beside the hatch that exposed a mass of wires. Within a few short seconds he had located the wires he needed, stripped back a little of the plastic shielding and had attached the tiny piece of electronics that would allow him to work unnoticed.
He opened the maintenance hatch and then grabbed the small battery powered drill and drilled a 1cm diameter hole through the hatch door. This was very slow going and would probably completely drain the battery on the drill. Couldn’t be helped, and besides, all of the rest of the work could be done by hand, even if if would have been easier to use the spanner tool on the drill. Once the drill finished cutting through the multiple layers of the hatch door he inserted the rubber tubing and applied a sealing resin around the hole to make it air tight.
The other end of the hose looked just like an air attachment you see at any garage that is used for inflating car tyres. In fact, that is exactly what it was, except this one was designed to deflate tyres. He checked that he had everything with him for the one millionth time and then hid the drill inside of an unsuspecting suitcase.
He climbed down into the undercarriage feet first and carefully closed the hatch above him. With the hatch closed it was incredibly cramped. That area, although quite large and can easily fit a man in, was quite a snug fit for the gigantic undercarriage assembly. He somehow managed to maneuver himself into position so he could attach the other end of the rubber hose to the valve on the closest tyre to him. He held his breathe and listened out for the tell-tale hiss of the dry nitrogen escaping harmlessly into the baggage compartment above his head.
Deflating the tyre was going to take at least half an hour but it was necessary because he needed the room. He could have just uncoupled the whole thing and dropped it out the bottom of the plane over the Atlantic, but that would mean that the plane would not have been able to land safely and hundreds of innocent people could have been killed.
He used the time to meditate and keep himself and his mind as relaxed as possible. It was vitally important that his adrenaline levels were at their lowest possible point, otherwise all of this would be a complete waste of time. Listening to the hiss of the escaping gas he closed his eyes, took some long drawn out breaths and began lowering his heart rate.
Finally, after what seemed an eternity, he had the room he needed. He made his way down past the, now completely deflated, tyre to the aircraft’s outer hull. He located the manual release that opened the door to allow the undercarriage to be extended. Before opening the door he checked his watch which came equipped with an altimeter… 9,603 metres. Excellent, he thought to himself, that will give him the time he needed to reach terminal velocity.
He took a few seconds to ready himself, and then began cranking the handle that would open the outer door to the undercarriage bay. This part of the aircraft wasn’t pressurised so there was no danger of being blown out of the plane before he was ready. All the same though, there was a noticeable drop in pressure when the seal was broken. At that moment he stopped, held his breath, and listened. An odd thing to do really considering that he would not have been able to hear anyone coming anyway. A second or two later he realised that and got back to cranking. He only needed to open that door enough to fit his body through, but it was hard going and was going to take some time.
Time to go!
He positioned himself so that he was sitting on the door with his back to the nose of the plane, and slowly inched toward the opening. Once he got his legs almost all the way out of the plane, with just his buttocks on the edge of the door he flipped over onto his stomach. He could feel the passing wind pulling him out and knew that all he had to do now was let go. He tested the strength of his left arm by gingerly letting go with his right. Good, he could maintain his position with just one arm for now.
With his right hand he reached into a pocket on his left sleeve and pulled out the hypo gun. The same sort that diabetics use to inject themselves with insulin, but this one didn’t contain insulin. It had a chemical cocktail that would put him into a deep sleep exactly 45 seconds from when he injected it. It’s affects would only last 12 minutes, but that would be ample time.
45 seconds to go. Let go!
As soon as he was clear of the plane he quickly got his bearings and straightened his body with his arms by his sides.
35 seconds to go.
He pointed his head toward the ground and began to accelerate.
25 seconds to go, 185 kilometres per hour.
15 seconds to go, 265 kilometres per hour.
4 seconds to go, 345 kilometres per hour. Terminal velocity! Yes! he thought to himself, it is going to work!! It has to work.
Darkness.
He hadn’t expected to dream, but dream he did. He dreamed of when he was a boy of maybe 4 or 5. His parents had taken him out for a day at the fair, there were rides and ponies. He loved ponies and was pleading with his father to let him ride on the pony. At the next moment they were in a completely different place and different time. Something in his subconscious noted how odd it was how dreams jump all over the place. His parents were gone and he was alone… all alone. He felt scared.
It was the universe fighting back. It wasn’t much, but it was enough to raise his pulse a few beats per minute. The higher his heart rate, the more hold the universe could exert over him. Strangely it was the steps he had taken so that this wouldn’t happen which was the exact reason why it was. While sleeping he couldn’t be influenced by the sight of the ocean heading toward him at 345 kilometres per hour, or the sound of the air rushing passed him. He could keep his adrenaline from rising. He just couldn’t stop himself from dreaming. It was through his dreams that the universe was fighting him now.
His heart rate was now a staggering 245 beats per minute and he regained consciousness. That should have been impossible. The chemicals in his body should have ensured that. But something brought him back to consciousness, he couldn’t figure out why. It was at that moment that he felt it. The hotness that began somewhere in the middle of his head, behind his eyes.
Noooooo! Not again!
It filled him with fear and anxiety which only made things worse. Those feelings fuelled what was now inevitable. Sure enough, when he opened his eyes he could see the distortion beginning to form in front of him. It would have gone unnoticed to anyone else it was so slight, but he had seen it countless times before and could spot it a mile away. Part of space in front of him was out of kilter by a few millimetres.
When he came to he could smell animal. Not quite sure what sort of animal, but definitely animal. Horse! Yes, that was it. He could smell horse. He opened his eyes and could see he was inside some sort of structure. There was hay on the ground, and a definite odour of horse.
Where am I?
He whispered to himself, and followed it up with a more pressing question…
When am I?
Till next time…
Chapter Two: Men Of Honour. But make sure you leave a comment here before you head over to the next chapter, yeah? 
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Any chance of more? I want to see more.
Twitter: HorstBurkhardt
Well Michelle has asked the same thing, so I guess there will be more.
I’m really happy you liked it, Horst. I’ve been stressing over its quality ever since I hit “Publish”.
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Oh wow, great story! Add me to the, can’t wait to read the next chapter…..
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Of course, you know what this means, don’t you? Now I have to think up a name for the main character.
You’ll never know how much it means to me, Barbara, to have you say that you liked this story. You’ll be happy to hear that I’m nutting out in my head what’s going to happen in the next chapter. I already know where and when he is. No, you can’t have any hints, I want it to be a surprise.
Kindest regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
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Good story Steve, but When am I? Is he a time traveler as well? Man, I can’t wait until the next episode.
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All I’m prepared to say is that he might have a secret or two.
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hi Steve
Just managed to get back. Been hectic with family things and a GP just published!
I loved the story and glad it hasn’t finished. Now I just have to be patient to wait for the next exciting chapter. This is really different to your other posts and a surprise when I clicked over here.
Well done Steve and here’s to your continued chapters. Will be watching out for it on Twitter.
Patricia Perth Australia
Patricia@lavenderuses wrote: Are Your Goals Attainable In 2011
Twitter: lavenderuses
Hi Patricia!
Well, as long as it’s always a nice surprise when you come here and see something you don’t expect, then that’s OK.
I’m really happy that you have enjoyed the story so far. Hopefully you’ll enjoy the next chapter at least as much, if not more.
Thanks, Patricia, your comments mean a lot to me, they really do.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
More, I need to know more! Don’t leave me hanging like that, Steve!
Twitter: pegbaron
There’ll be more, Peggy, I promise.
You’re lucky though, because originally this was going to be the entire story and I was just going to leave you all thinking and wondering. But then everyone who read it started saying the same thing… that they wanted to read more. Now, I don’t mind frustrating a couple of people, in fact some would have you believe that I rather enjoy doing that, but I couldn’t do it to everyone.
So, yes, there will be more chapters to this story (did you notice the plural there).
Kind regards,
Steve
P.S. I wonder if there’s a market for PLR Fiction?
Twitter: SteveYoungs
No, ending the story there would be cruel! I must know what happens next? Or actually, I’d quite like to know what has happened so far
More , More!
Lesley from EasyContentBlueprints wrote: Your Internet Priorities- What Should They Be
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Hi Lesley!
It’s great to have you here, welcome to one of my little bits of the Internet.
Glad you have enjoyed the story so far, and don’t worry, I’ll be adding some back story in the upcoming chapters.
Thanks so much for stopping by, Lesley. I hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Steve, you little devil, quite the author, aren’t ya mate??
Impressed with what you’ve done here man and looking forward to part II.
Marcus
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Thanks, Marcus!
I’m actually starting to consider a change in direction here and doing more fiction. I really enjoyed writing this one, even though I did stress out to the max after I published it because I was worried nobody would like it. Damn me for being my own worst critic.
I’m really happy you enjoyed the first chapter, mate. Here’s to hoping the next will be as good, if not better.
Thanks for stopping by, mate. Really appreciate your support.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Dude,
I didn’t know you were a writer,
At first I didn’t have a cluse what this post was about, then I realised, I like the intrigue and mystery.
Is the Character a time traveller and has found himself in a real horse of troy?
Ryan Renfrew @LifestyleDesign wrote: 10 Steps To Combat The Leaky Bucket Syndrome
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Hey Ryan!
Glad you liked it, mate. Oh, god I hope he’s not inside a real horse.. that’d be too tough for me to explain I think.
Twitter: SteveYoungs
WOW – quite compelling! I am literally getting ready to run out to a meeting but couldn’t stop reading your article. You are an awesome writer and I look forward to part II!
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Hi Julie!
First of all, welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere. It is wonderful to have you here!
Thank you so much for the awesome compliment. I honestly can’t tell you how much that means to me, rest assured, it’s off the scale!
I’m really glad you’ve enjoyed the story so far, Julie. I hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hey, there’s definitely a Lee Child influence in there somewhere! Look forward to the next instalment!
Dawn Baird wrote: How Much Does “Self Help” Help
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Hi Dawn!
Welcome to one of my little bits of this Internet thing. It’s really great to have you here!
If there is influence from Lee Child it is purely coincidental, and of that I can absolutely guarantee… I’ve never heard of Lee Child.
I’ll go Google him (her?) later.
Thanks very much for taking the time to swing by and comment, Dawn. I really appreciate that. Hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
I liked this post. Very cool story. It actually sounds like something from what Ive read that could be in a book. Very nice writing
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Hey Edwin!
Had to dig you out of Akismet spam folder this time, buddy.
Glad you enjoyed it, mate. Thanks much for stopping by again and commenting!
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hey Steve,
This was a really good story. I need more. I couldn’t stop reading. You’ve given me an idea to write short stories. Thanks and can’t wait until the next one.
Alyx
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Hi Alyx!
Welcome to my little piece of the blogosphere, mate. It’s great to have you here!
Thanks Alyx, glad you’ve enjoyed it so far. Chapter two should be ready by about Sunday (my timezone which is UTC+10), so you shouldn’t have to wait too long.
I really appreciate you taking the time to swing by and comment, mate. Thanks so much for that! I hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Very creative and well put together Steve. You captured my attention! I will be back for more. Keep up the great work
Thank you,
Brandon
Hi Brandon!
Welcome to one of my little bits of this Internet thingy. It’s great to have you here!
Thanks very much for the kind words, mate. I’m really happy that you have enjoyed the story so far. Can’t wait to see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hi Steve
Great story, really hooks the reader. keep writing.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
All the best
Regards
Zahid
Twitter: zahidyk
Hi Zahid!
Welcome to one of my little pieces of the Internet. It’s great to have you here.
Thanks so much for your kind words, they mean a lot to me.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hi Steve
No problems, will be popping back gain soon.
Take care.
Zahid
Twitter: zahidyk
Nice mix of tranquility and adrenaline. Keep up the good work, my friend. This seriously kicks.
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Hi Jody!
Welcome to one of my little bits of this Internet thingy. It’s really great to have you here, mate!
Glad you enjoyed it so far, Jody. Don’t forget this is just the first chapter. Chapter two is out now, called: Men Of Honour.
Thanks so much for taking the time to swing by and comment, Jody. I really appreciate that and hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hi Steve:
Thanks for the email. I was so blind last night I did not see the comments and this morning I can see it. So, as far as fiction goes this is after a long time I read the fiction again. I am intrigued by the expressions, imagination and the place where it takes the reader. Specially to describe the inside of a plane, the freight and mechanical area, you can’t write unless you know it by experience. It is written in a natural and real style.
Outstanding chapter, can become # 1 with promotion as a full book, once written in full.
Thanks for sharing
fran A
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Hi Fran!
Welcome to my little patch of the blogosphere, Fran. It is great to have you here!
I’m really happy that you enjoyed the story so far. I hate to tell you this, but I’ve never been anywhere near the baggage compartment of an aeroplane, or its undercarriage assembly. That was pure imagination.
The fact that you found it believable is a massive compliment to me, so thank you very very much for that!
Thanks so much for taking the time to swing by and leave a comment. I really appreciate that, Fran, and hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve.
P.S. Don’t forget, Chapter two is out now: Men Of Honour
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hi Steve:
I was just curious about my comment and your reaction as I never did comment a fiction before. Now when I came to know that you have never been to an area in the plain that you have described in the chapter, it is amazing, your coffee works wonders or you are a natural writer.
utilize this gift to monetize.
I will come another time to read the 2nd chapter.
fran A
Fran Aslam@online writer wrote: Personal qualities Of Online Expert Blogger
Haha! Yep, the coffee’s great.
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Great story, I am on the edge of my seat waiting for more! Hurry please before I fall…
Sean Mathena @ Find Your Peak wrote: Achieving Your Goals- Breaking Them Down
Twitter: findyourpeak
Hi Sean!
Welcome to my part of the blogosphere, mate. It’s great to have you here!
No need to worry about falling off your chair, mate, chapter two is out already: Men Of Honour. I hope you enjoy that as much as this one.
Thanks for taking the time to swing by and comment, Sean. That means a lot to me. Hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hi Steve,
Very creative and engaging, but you gotta write more man, you can’t leave us hanging. We want more!
Riley
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Hi Riley!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere. It is really great to have you here, mate!
Glad you enjoyed the story so far. Chapter two, Men Of Honour is already out.
Thanks for taking the time to stop by and leave a comment, Riley. I really appreciate that and hope to see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve.
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Wow, great writing Steve…
I’m jealous!!! Have always wanted to write a book but I lack that inventive imagination that seems to just flow with you. I was glued to the words wondering just what the heck he was up to. And then I get to the end and you put “When am I?” Okay, got my mind to thinking. Will definitely look forward to the rest.
Great job!
Adrienne
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Hi Adrienne!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere. It is really great to have you here!
Thank you very much for your kind words. I’ve been completely blown away by the responses I’ve gotten so far. Just makes me want to write more.
BTW, chapter two is out, hope you enjoy that as much as you did this one.
Thank you so much for taking the time to stop and leave a comment, Adrienne. That means so much to me. Hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
I’m going to head over to Chapter 2 very soon and get all caught up. Can’t wait to read more and please do keep up the writing. We are all so intrigued now…
Best to you,
Adrienne
Adrienne wrote: Blog Commenting- My New Favorite Thing
I think I can pretty much assure you that I’ll be writing more… a lot more. I’m having way too much fun with it to stop now.
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Well, well. What a pleasant surprise. Randomly clicking on blog links is fun, fun, fun!
You’ve got the touch, Steve. This is primetime television material.
A clever introduction to a most intriguing character.
I join the group of eager fans.
Cheers,
Mitch
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Twitter: Anklebuster
Haha, cool! Glad you enjoyed it, mate!
Television you reckon, hey? Hmm, don’t know about that, then again, I’ve not ever thought about it either. Books? Sure, I’ve got plenty of those in me just waiting to get out.
Thank you so much for reading. Hope you like chapter two.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Is this your creation, Steve? It’s so damn interesting. I will be back for the next chapter. Well done!
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Hi Anne!
Yes, it’s all from my weird and over-active imagination.
I’m really happy that you enjoyed the first chapter. I hope you like the 2nd just as much.
Thanks for taking the time to swing by again and comment. That means the world to me.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Great story Steve, nice cliffhanger too. Now I have to read the next….
Steve@Internet Lifestyle wrote: Get More Blog Traffic Blueprint Week 10
Twitter: stevescott1
Cool! Glad you enjoyed it, mate. And I’m glad, too, that the cliffhanger did its job (I see you’ve already read chapter 2).
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hey Steve. Man you’re a terrific writer. Hope you’re not gonna leave us hangin’ on that last scene. Definitely hopin to read the rest. Otherwise, let me also say that those details were mind blowing. I’ve often wondered how writers do this sort of thing and make stories sound so life like. Whatever the answer is , youve certainly got the gift.
Until the next time…
Benin @ Build a Better Mouse Trap wrote: From Zero to Blog Immortal in One Hundred Comments
Twitter: Benin
Hi Benin!
Welcome to one of my little corners of the Internet, mate. It’s great to have you here!
Nope, I won’t leave you hanging, in fact here’s chapter two: Men Of Honour
I’m really happy that you have enjoyed the story so far, Benin. As for wondering about the detail and making it seem life like, I’m not sure I can shed any light on that, I’m afraid. I just see the story unfold in my head almost like watching a movie, then all I do is write it down. Sorry for being vague in my answer, mate.
Thank you so much for taking the time to swing by and leave a comment, Benin. That means the world to me. Hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Steve –
You definitely have a knack for fictional writing. Very enjoyable piece and definitely looking forward to where you take this, as it has the hook of a story with great potential,
Keep it up!
Twitter: justinhamlin
Hey Justin!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere, mate. It’s great to have you here!
Thanks, mate, glad you enjoyed it so far. Chapter two is out now too: Men Of Honour. (hmm, think it’s about time I put a link at the end of chapter one)
Thanks very much for taking the time to swing by and comment, Justin. I really appreciate that and hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve.
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Steve, thanks. No..your explanation makes perfect sense. Thanks for the link to the second chapter. Can’t wait to check it out.
And ohhhh yes…I certainly plan to be back soon. Take care, mate. Cheers!
Benin @ Build a Better Mouse Trap wrote: From Zero to Blog Immortal in One Hundred Comments
Twitter: Benin
Excellent, mate. Thanks so much!
Twitter: SteveYoungs
You’re welcome Steve!
Benin @ Build a Better Mouse Trap wrote: From Zero to Blog Immortal in One Hundred Comments
Twitter: Benin
Hi, Steve
It could be a great trilogy. Do you watch FRINGE? you could get some science idea.
It’s such a nice story can’t wait to read some more. I hope you’ll not let us hang, and hey add some superb twist
Hi Stef!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere, Stef. It’s really great to have you here!
Don’t worry, chapter two is out and ready for you. It’s called “Men Of Honour“. No, I can’t do a trilogy, I’m sorry… there’s way too much story to come after chapter 3.
FRINGE? No, I’ve never seen that, but I don’t watch all that much television.
Thanks so much for taking the time to swing by and comment, Stef. That means the world to me. Hope I’ll see you back again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Wow, great story. Love the cliffhanger ending. My guess is that he figured out a way to time travel via skydiving, but he can’t always control where he ends up.
Looking forward to reading more!
Niall Doherty wrote: Coming next week- Random Acts of Courage
Hi Niall!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere. It’s really great to have you here!
Glad you’ve enjoyed it so far, and I like your guess… it’s not quite right, but I like it nonetheless.
Thanks for taking the time to swing by and leave a comment. I really appreciate that. Hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Fascinating stuff Steve. I have to go and read the next chapter now!
I’m actually a freelance writer but I’ve decided to make a little bit of a return back to my roots by writing some fiction and poetry again. Reading good stuff like this is inspiring!
Danielle McGaw @ social media for freelance writers wrote: The Social Media Secret for Freelance Writers
Twitter: DanielleMcGaw
Hi Danielle!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere. It’s great to have you here!
Inspiring? Wow. I never thought of it as inspiring, I was going for entertaining, but inspiring is good too.
Yeah, I know you were entertained as well, the inspiration was just icing on the cake. Awesome!
Thanks so much for taking the time to swing by and comment, Danielle. I really appreciate that and I’m so glad you enjoyed this first chapter.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hi Steve great story. Kept me going right until the end. I’ll definitely be reading more of this. Chapter 2 here I come!
Robert Dempsey@Online Marketing Strategies wrote: 3 Fast And Cheap Ways To Increase Website Conversion Rates
Twitter: rdempsey
Hi Robert!
Welcome to one of my little bits of this Internet thingy. It’s great to have you here, mate!
I’m really happy that you have enjoyed it so far, Robert. Thanks so much for taking the time to swing by and read, mate. That means the world to me. Hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hello Steve,
Indeed, a great story, I like it very much and I’m not just saying it. It’s obviously that you put a lot of passion in your stories and you’re a wordsmith, you know how to talk and make people feel various emotions through your text. Congratulations for your artistic sense, you’re very good at writing!
Best regards,
Maria
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Hi Maria!
Wow, thank you for the awesome compliments, Maria. I really enjoy this type of writing and it is such a buzz for me when people like yourself tell me how much you like reading it.
Thank you so much for reading, Maria. I honestly cannot begin to tell you how much that means to me.
Kindest regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Steve,
Interesting thang you got going. Although I blog about online business and stuff I’ve been lately getting the itch to write fiction again – haven’t written for maybe 8 years.
And I thought of starting a blog or website just to get fiction out there – forget trying to please to the gatekeepers at magazines and publishing houses.
I’m waiting to see someone burst the fiction world with a Gary Vaynerchuk type approach – maybe it will be you? Or me? We’ll see, I probably won’t have ‘time’ to write until later in the year, but I’m gonna do it.
I’ll be following your journey…
Paul
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Hi Paul!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere, mate. It’s really great to have you here!
Haha! I wonder… what would be the Gary Vaynerchuk approach to fiction? Would I even want to go there? Erm, probably not. I write because I love to write, and the fact that there are plenty of folks who write better than I could ever hope to doesn’t bother me. I don’t have any desire to be number one, or more specifically, better than everyone else. I do have a desire to be the best me I can be though, and if that means that more people enjoy my writing, well that’s icing on the cake.
Speaking of enjoying my writing, you never actually said if you liked this first chapter of the story or not. I’d like to think that because you took the time to leave a comment that you did enjoy it? Well, even if you didn’t, I reckon that it is awesome that you did comment. Thank you so much for that. It really means the world to me. I hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Throughout the whole thing, my brain kept screaming “is there such technology? (to fool the xray, to fool the control panel on the plane, etc).
Besides that, it was damn compelling. Good stuff man.
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Hi Dino!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere, mate. It’s really great to have you here!
Well, I’m awfully glad that your screaming brain didn’t get in the way of your overall enjoyment of the story.
Thank you so much for taking the time to swing by and read, mate. I really do appreciate that and I hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hi Steve,
I am trully speachless, your great talent left me amazed. You are a great wordsmith, you really know how to write a great Science-Fiction story, with all that time-travelling idea – just genius! When I will start writing stories too, I will try to use your text structure, I hope you don’t mind. Extremely inspiring, thank you very much for sharing this masterpiece!
All the best and don’t give up!
Cristian
Hi Cristian!
Welcome to one of my little bits of this Internet thing. It is great to see you here!
I’m really happy that you enjoyed the story so far, Cristian, and thank you so very much for your awesome compliments. No, I won’t mind at all if my writings inspire your own, providing that doesn’t mean copy and pasting.
Thanks for taking the time to swing by and leave a comment, mate. I really appreciate that and hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hi Steve,
First time here on your blog via the 100 Blog Comment Challenge and I must admit, at first glance I thought what’s this…?
But then I read the very different post and wow! Great story!
Real attention grabbing writing!
I’m really looking forward to the next chapter.
Robert
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Twitter: IM_RobSimpson
Hi Robert!
Welcome to one of my little patches of this Internet thingy. It’s great to have you here!
I’m really happy that you have enjoyed the story so far, mate. Thanks so much for taking the time to swing by and comment. I hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
You might like the Creative Copy Challenge game over on the CCC (creativecopychallenge.com) this game you get 10 words and have to write an original story including all 10 words and is played 2x per week. I am over there regularly as are some other writers who I see stop by here.
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Twitter: dragonblogger
Oh, that sounds interesting. I’ll have to go check that out.
Thanks for letting me know about it, Justin.
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Another blogger coming to your site as part of the 100 comment challenge, you can definitely feel the sense of urgency in the story and the danger. Couldn’t help but be reminded a little of the movie Air Force One with Harrison Ford a little.
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Twitter: dragonblogger
Hi Justin!
Welcome to my site, mate. It’s an honour have you here!
I’m really happy that you enjoyed the story so far, Justin. Hope you like chapter two as much (there’s a link at the bottom of this chapter).
Thanks so much for taking the time to read, mate. I really appreciate that and hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Steve you know how to write compelling stories!
There was no way I was going to stop reading, because I had to know just WTF was going on
It’s not always easy to do, but you pulled it off. I’ll definitely keep reading, cuz I just gotta know what’s up with this guy. The questions must be answered…WHEN is he??
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Twitter: johngarrettx
Hi John!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere, mate. It is really great to have you here!
Thanks for your kind words, John. They’re very much appreciated. I’m happy to hear that you are enjoying the story, and to answer your question. read the next chapter.
I hope I’ll see you back here again soon, John. Thanks for stopping by.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
What was that? A suicide? Or something short of a paratrooping? That was a really good story. Very interesting and insightful. I can’t wait for the next part to be released. You surely got a talent for fiction.
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Hi Samantha!
Great to see you again! Yes, it was a suicide attempt. But that is all I’m going to say.
I’m so happy that you enjoyed the story so far, and you don’t need to wait… chapter two is already available (there’s a link to it at the bottom of chapter one).
Thank you very much for visiting again, Samantha. I really appreciate that.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Steve,
Nicely done. It captured my interest from the start and kept me reading.
John
Twitter: john__muldoon
Hi John!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere. It’s great to have you here!
Glad you liked it, mate. And thanks very much for taking the time to read and leave a comment. Really appreciate that. Hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hey Steve…
WoW.. I’m with Ryan on this one. I liked the mysterious vibe. I’m not much of a reader but when i do find a book I like I tend not to put it down until it’s finished, and yours would be one of them. Already signed up to your RSS feed, can’t wait to see what comes next . I’m loving your site…It’s different and sometimes different is good.
Kerry Russell
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Twitter: Kerry_L_Russell
Hi Kerry!
Welcome to one of my little bits of this Internet thingy. It’s great to have you here!
I’m really happy that you have enjoyed the story so far, Kerry, and thank you so much for taking the time to stop by and leave a comment. That means the world to me. Hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Wow. This is totally not what I expected – and first I thought it was a book (based on where the scroll bar was – until I realized it was all the comments in here.
I haven’t read much non-fiction in years but you have a nack for it. Maybe there are books in your future?
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Twitter: GrowMap
Hi Gail!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere. It’s really great to have you here!
You’re right, Gail, it’s not a book, it is just the first chapter. lol Also, you have your fictions and non-fictions mixed up. You have just read a fine work of fiction here.
Thank you so very much for taking the time to visit and comment, Gail. I really appreciate that. Hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Well done Steve, I was gripped all the way through. Is this going to be science fiction? Is your hero immortal, moving through the multiverse? I wait some answers in chapter two.
You write very well Steve, good pacing and the story propels the narrative. In paper form this would be a page turner, maybe a best-seller?
John
Jealous of your writing in Leamington Spa, England
Twitter: johnmcnally54
Hi John!
Thanks for your kind words, mate. I really appreciate that. Glad you have enjoyed the story so far. I just need to get off me butt now and write some more of it, hey.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
When I was in 8th grade I started to write stories as a cop but despite all my colleagues encouraged me, my teacher did not publish any story in the “book of the school”. I was sad, very sad at that time.
You have something that not everybody have and i wish to read more stories from you.
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Hi Patel!
Welcome to one of my little pieces of this Internet thingy. It’s great to have you here!
Oh that’s a shame that your stories didn’t get published. But now you don’t have to rely on any school teachers to get your stuff published so you can write and publish as much as you want to now. Yay technology!
Thanks for taking the time to visit and leave a comment. I really appreciate that, Patel. Hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hey, Steve!
I’ve seen you around on Steve Scott Site, but never made the time to come around. Was actually here as I am jumping onto the 100 comments challenge, and you got me hooked to your blog like anything!
I read the first two chapters of your marvelous creation-in-progress, and you got me so impatient for more
Do you have the overall plot worked out already, or are you taking it as it comes?
I was reading some of the comments, and you said you’ve never been anywhere near the baggage compartment of an aeroplane, or its undercarriage assembly. Man, I commend your imagination!
I’m glad I’m getting to see a bestseller in the making. Here’s wishing you loads of luck and more creativity to come out with a fabulous hit!
I’ll see you around…
Wishing you success,
Mark
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Hi Mark!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere. It’s great to have you here!
I’m really glad you have enjoyed the story so far, though I’m not sure I’d call “best seller”.
As for the overall plot, I have a rough idea of some of it, but it is very flexible and changes quite a lot as I write. 
Thanks for taking the time to swing by and comment, Mark. I really appreciate that and hope I’ll see you back here again soon.
Kind regards,
Steve
P.S. Oh, forgot to ask… which article do you want in Ryan’s 100 comment challenge? It’s not listed on Ryan’s site, from what I can see.
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hello.
When I came to your blog, and after I read a few lines of Chapter 2, I realized that I absolutely must read the first chapter.
Already captivated me. Immediately go to the next chapter.
Twitter: AlexGheorghitan
Hey Alex!
Glad you liked it, mate. Thanks so much for taking the time to swing by and read. Very much appreciated.
Kind regards,
Steve.
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Hi Steve,
This story is extremely cool, you’re a fantastic writer, I really got to read the next part. Those details and this story .. just wow… mind blowing, heh. I’m very glad that the story didn’t end here, hooray! I saw that this is different to your other posts and I couldn’t help myself not clicking to read this. Please do keep writing!
See you soon!
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Hi Adrian!
Welcome to my little corner of the blogosphere. It’s great to have you here.
Thanks very much for the outrageous compliments, glad you enjoyed the story.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs
I made the same mistake as Alex. I started reading chapter two but I realized that something was missing and i come here.
It is a great story and when you read gives you a feeling hard to describe. I like it!
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Glad you enjoyed it, Angela
Twitter: SteveYoungs
Oh, great story, I love stories like this where you can’t wait to read the next chapter. Heading to Chapter 2 now. Great idea.
Twitter: martin_amy
Hi Amy!
Great to see a new face. Welcome to my little patch of the blogosphere.
Thanks so much for stopping by, and I’m happy to hear that you have enjoyed the story so far.
Kind regards,
Steve
Twitter: SteveYoungs